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Die Aufgabenstellung lautet:

1. Summary of the Chapter 11 of the novel "The Body" by Stephen King

2. Analyze the relationship between the boys!

3. Kann mir bitte jemand erklären wie man Texte analysiert? (nicht nur auf Englisch)

1. The Chapter 11 taken from Stephen King’s novel “The Body” is about crying Teddy. He cries because Milo told him that his father is a madman. Vern Tessio tells the other bosy about his dreams and feelings if he will see the dead body.


2.When the four boys reached the bridge Teddy suddenly burst into tears because Milo tells him that his father is a Madman. (p. 25 l. 15) Teddy loves his father and he is very proud of him. His father was in the war and he was at Normandy. Vern tried to calm him down but he is not good on it. (p. 25 l. 20) The boys do not know what to do. But Chris is both the hardest boy in their gang and he is also the guy who makes the best piece. (p. 25 ll. 24-25) He is very good at it. (p. 25 l. 25) At this situation we can see that they all are best friends and treats each other like very good friends. They understand each other very good and do not treat Teddy like a pussy although his behaviour is like a pussy. Chris speaks with him like an adult to an adult although both boys are under sixteen years old. He convinces Teddy that Milo does not know Teddy’s father and he only wanted to get Teddy and bring him to police. (p. 26 ll.19-22). Teddy believes him and stops to cry and be sad. At this moment will it clear that the guys trust among themselves.
Teddy asks the other guys if he is like a baby. (p. 26 l. 27) And the other boys denial it because they know that they have to support Teddy at this difficult moment. The guys support each other if someone has problems. It shows that they are real good friends.
But Gordie can not understand Teddy because they all know that his Teddy’s father had almost killed him (p. 26-27 ll.33-1) Gordie’s parents do not care of him and he can not love or hate his father because his father never had beaten him and that is why he can not understand his friend Teddy.
Vern tells the other boys about his dreams and feelings which can be after he will see the dead body (p. 27 ll. 14-18). He tells the truth and it improves that they trust each other and they can hear about the problems of their friends. After his speech he wants that the other boys do not tell what he said to the other:” We all said we wouldn’t”.

ich versuchs mal...aber kann dir nicht versprechen obs was wird, meine grammatik hat in letzter zeit ziemlich gelitten

-"taken from" hab ich noch nie gehoert..ich wuerd einfach "The Chapter 11 in Steven King's..."
-tell in zwei aufeinanderfolgenden saetzen ist vom stil her nicht gut, nimm "Vern Tessio narrates.."
- tippfehler: bosy
- bei tell waere das about richtig, narrates wird aber als narrates sth gebaut => about weg
- was du mit dem if ausdreucken willst verstehe ich nicht ganz...

- "his father was at war in the Normandy"
- "..calm him down but without success"
- "But Chris ist the hardest.."
- "..we can see that they are best friends and treats each other very good"
- biste dir ueber den begriff pussy sicher?
- speak to sb => "Chris speaks to him.."
- "speaks to him like an adult although..."
- "and he only wanted Teddy arrested by the police" find ich besser
- "believes him, stops to cry and to be sad"
- "moment it's clear.."
- trust in sb => "trust in themselves"
- denial ist glaube ich kein verb...nimm deny
- "they are really good friends"
- "cannot"
- "that Teddy's fahter" ich weiss nicht ob das inhaltlich richtig ist, aber deine version geht nicht
- "do not take care of him" oder "do not care for him"
- "cannot"
- "his father has never beaten him"
- "cannot"
- "which...body" versteh nicht was du damit meinst
- nimm lieber "and their relationship improves"
- "and they can hear about problems" was meinst du damit?

pass auf, dass du nicht zu oft wiederholungen reinbringst. gibt zwar nicht wirklcih ein fehler, zieht aber den stil unheimlich runter. ueberleg einfach mal, was du noch so fuer tell nehmen kannst.

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Chapter 11 [highlight=red]in[/highlight] Stephen King’s novel “The Body” is about crying Teddy. He cries because Milo [highlight=red]tells[/highlight] him that his father is a madman. Vern Tessio tells the other boys about the dreams and feelings [highlight=red]he would have[/highlight] if he [highlight=red]saw[/highlight] the dead body.


2.When the four boys [highlight=red]reach [/highlight]the bridge Teddy suddenly [highlight=red]bursts[/highlight] into tears because Milo tells him that his father is a Madman. (p. 25 l. 15) Teddy loves his father and he is very proud of him. His father was in the war and he was at Normandy. Vern [highlight=red]tries[/highlight] to calm him down, [highlight=red]without success[/highlight] (p. 25 l. 20) The boys do not know what to do. But Chris is the [highlight=red]toughest[/highlight] [hardest boy geht in die sexuelle richtung ] boy in their gang and he is also the guy who makes the best piece. [piece of what?] (p. 25 ll. 24-25) He is very good at it. (p. 25 l. 25) [highlight=red]In[/highlight] this situation we can see that they all are best friends and [highlight=red]treat[/highlight] each other like very good friends. They understand each other very good and do not treat Teddy like a [highlight=red]coward[/highlight] [mit pussy schon wieder im sexuellen]although [highlight=red]he behaves like one[/highlight]. Chris speaks [highlight=red]to[/highlight] him like an adult to an adult although both boys are under sixteen. He convinces Teddy that Milo does not know Teddy’s father and he only wanted to get Teddy and bring him to [highlight=red]the[/highlight] police. (p. 26 ll.19-22). Teddy believes him and stops [highlight=red]crying[/highlight] and [highlight=red]being[/highlight] sad. At this moment [highlight=red]it becomes clear[/highlight] that the guys trust [highlight=red]each other.[/highlight]
Teddy asks the other guys if he is like a baby. (p. 26 l. 27) And the other boys [highlight=red]deny[/highlight] it because they know that they have to support Teddy at this difficult moment. The guys support each other if someone has problems. It shows that they are [highlight=red]really[/highlight] good friends.
But Gordie can not understand Teddy because they all know that his Teddy’s father almost killed him (p. 26-27 ll.33-1) Gordie’s parents do not [highlight=red]take[/highlight] care of him and he can [highlight=red]neither[/highlight] love [highlight=red]nor [/highlight]hate his father because his father had never beaten him and that is why he can not understand his friend Teddy.
Vern tells the other boys about his dreams and feelings which [highlight=red]he will have[/highlight] after [highlight=red]seeing[/highlight] the dead body (p. 27 ll. 14-1. He tells the truth and it [highlight=red]proves[/highlight] that they trust each other and they can [highlight=red]listen to[/highlight] the problems of their friends. After his speech [highlight=red]he wants the other boys not to tell[/highlight] what he said to the other:” We all said we wouldn’t”.